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In past , the role of teacher was to provide information. Today, students have access to wide sources of information. There is , therefore, no role of teacher in modern education. Do you agree or disagree?

#role #teacher #information #students #access #sources #education
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It cannot be denied that nowadays
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teachers
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role
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 as
information
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provider
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 has been replaced by the
internet
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This
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 has made some people
to
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believe that
teachers
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 have no more
role
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 in modern education.
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, some see it in a different light. In my view,
teachers
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 still have
important
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role
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 in
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modern education. These days, it is true that with the help of the
internet
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, it is easy for
students
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 to access wide sources of
informations
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information
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. They can learn many
things
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 that they did not get at
school
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.
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, they can learn about subjects
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 as economics or programming and even
looking
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 for
explanation
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explanations
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 of topics that
teachers
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 at
school
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 did not cover. In short,
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internet
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the internet
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 has been a big help for
students
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 to learn many new
things
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, the
role
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 of a
teacher
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 is not only
provide
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information
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 for
students
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. There are a lot more
of
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things
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 that
students
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 can learn from their
teachers
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.
Atittude
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 and morals,
for instance
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, are
things
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 that can
also
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be teach
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 by
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a teacher
the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 at
school
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. In brief, there is a lot more
of
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teacher's
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a teacher's
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role
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 other than providing
information
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 to their
students
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.
Teachers
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 can
also
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 be a person that children can
trust
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 when they are in
school
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. If they have problems at
school
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, they can talk to the
teacher
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 that they
trust
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.
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, when there is a student who
get
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 bullied by their friends,
this
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 student can talk to the
teacher
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 that they
trust
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 or when they have problems in a subject, they can ask their
teachers
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. In conclusion, when children are in
school
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,
teachers
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 are the person they can turn to when they are in need.
To conclude
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, it is true that, unlike in the past
where
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students
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 came to a
teacher
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 for
an
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information
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information
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 has been
such
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 a big help for
students
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 to learn many
things
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.
However
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, there are a lot more
of
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apply
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teachers
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' roles other than providing
information
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.
Teachers
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 can
also
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 be the person
students
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trust
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 when they are in
school
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.
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You effectively highlight the multi-faceted role of teachers beyond just providing information.
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