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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Firstly
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,
this
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 pie chart gives information regarding the consumption of
fish
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 and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
This
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 table has 6 years. These are ‘1979, 1984, 1989, 1994,1999 and 2004’.
Secondly
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, when we look at the panel
fish
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 had 60gr in 2004. Neither up nor down over the years. After that, lamb had 150gr in 2004 and Beef had 240gr in 1984.
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, the
chicken
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 had 250gr in 2004.
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chicken
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 is the most overwasted. As an extra, it was the consumed
fish
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. By the way,
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chicken
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the chicken
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 was consumed. Later on, the lamb had 60gr in 2004.
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, lamb was consumed at least in 2004. All in all, the diagram which is above mentioned describes
fish
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 and meat consumption. From my point of view generally, people prefer
chicken
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 more than others.
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, beef was opted. Taking everything into account, meat consumption increased in 1984 and 2004.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, gr, chicken with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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