The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the graph is
inteducing
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introducing
the
part time
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part-time
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of
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apply
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personnel working within
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the united
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united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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demonstrating
seveal
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several
contruties
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countries
contributes
to compare between them.
firstly
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, the graph
is comparing
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compares
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between years 1980 and 2010 on the
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incentives
that
been
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have been
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gained by the workers. the
comparision
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comparison
is taking place between England, Northern Ireland, Scotland and Wales, where Wales
showing
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shows
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the highest wages across the four
counties
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and
have
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has
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slightly
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increase
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increased
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from 1980 and 2010. the
increase
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is
demostrated
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demonstrated
across most of
United
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the United
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Kingdom cities except Northern Ireland where it shows
minimum
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a minimum
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decrease
from
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between
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1980 and 2010. the sharpest
increase
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occured
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occurred
on
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in
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scotland
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Scotland
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by 10% which
indicate
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indicates
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the
healthly
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healthy
economic system implemented
among
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in
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the city. on the
the
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apply
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hand, the year 1980
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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an average of 20% between
counties
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comparing
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compared
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to
year
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the year
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2010 where the average salaries
does
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do
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not have
dramatic
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a dramatic
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increase
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. the potential reason is that inflation
occured
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occurred
occurs
throughout the years
where
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which
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it
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apply
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has
possible
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a possible
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impact on
workers
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workers'
worker's
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income.
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for
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example, if we look into the four
counties
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,
i
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I
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could clearly tell that
majority
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the majority
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of
counties
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have to
increase
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their part time to tackle
the
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apply
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life
expinceses
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expenses
. in
conclution
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conclusion
, the worker
part time
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part-time
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generally is getting increased as we go through the years
as a result
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of external factors that
required
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are required
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to be challenged toward reaching
stable
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a stable
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economy within
United
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the United
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Kingdom.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words counties, increase with synonyms.
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