The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999.Summarize the informationby selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.
The graph
demostrates
the percentage of Correct your spelling
demonstrates
households
utalization
of several kinds of Correct your spelling
utilization
technologies
in U.S.
between Correct article usage
the U.S.
years
1995 up to 1999.
Correct article usage
the years
firstly
, there are Five differant
lines showing the type of Correct your spelling
different
technologies
used by households
where are of these technologies
showing
up-trend throughout Wrong verb form
show
years
1995 to 1999. the Correct article usage
the years
technologies
demonstrated in the chart includes
washing Correct subject-verb agreement
include
machine
, Fix the agreement mistake
machines
computer
, Fix the agreement mistake
computers
phone
, internet and DVD players. the washing Fix the agreement mistake
phones
machine
achived
the highest in usage among other Correct your spelling
achieved
techologies
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technologies
due to
high
demand of need in cleaning Correct article usage
the high
the
clothes which Correct article usage
apply
illestrates
80% Correct your spelling
illustrates
on
1999 Change preposition
in
comparing
to 1995 which scores 60%. Wrong verb form
compared
for
example, the use of washing Capitalize word
For
machine
in Fix the agreement mistake
machines
such
developed country is essentional
due Correct your spelling
essential
increase
in working hours among the Fix the infinitive
to increase
countly
.
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country
county
on the other hand
, the trend is
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apply
dramaticly inreased
in the Correct your spelling
dramatically increased
utalization
of phones from Correct your spelling
utilization
year
1998 to 1999 Change the article
the year
as a result
of demanding on
communication toward Change preposition
for
development
of the county. the other Add an article
the development
techonoglies
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technologies
showing
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show
slight
trend Correct article usage
a slight
up
by an average of 10% Change preposition
apply
in
Change preposition
on
yearly
basis, Correct article usage
a yearly
this
including
the Replace the word
includes
households
utalization of Change noun form
household's
households'
computer
, Fix the agreement mistake
computers
internet
and DVD Correct article usage
the internet
player
because of Fix the agreement mistake
players
complexity
of these Correct article usage
the complexity
technologies
.
in conclution
, Correct your spelling
conclusion
washing
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the washing
machine
is achiving
the Correct your spelling
achieving
highiest
contribtion and usage by Correct your spelling
highest
households
among other technologies
which displays the required increase in availing this
techology
across Correct your spelling
technology
U.S.
in every house and consider Correct article usage
the U.S.
such
high demand for upcoming years toward elevate the quality of households
life.Fix the agreement mistake
household
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