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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major citites with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparison where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major citites with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparison where relevant.
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table
illustrates
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 information about the underground railway system
about
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from
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the
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its
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opened
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opening
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 date with the
existsence
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existence
 data of kilometres of
route
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the route
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 and the
numbers
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number
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 of travelled passengers in
million
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millions
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 per day in six different popular cities. 
Overall
, The first initiation of
underground
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the underground
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 system was in London in 1863
while
 the
last
one's
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ones
one
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 was in Los
Angleles
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Angeles
2001
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in 2001
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.
Others
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Other
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 cities
was
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were
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 opened in between these years.
Moreover
, London received the highest number of kilometres of
route
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the route
a route
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 which is 394.
In contrast
, the rate of kilometres sharply decreased to
be
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apply
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11 in Kyoto which is
present
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apply
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the lower score. Related to
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of people
used
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using
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 the underground Paris
gain
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gained
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 the strongest rate with 1191 million passengers.
Furthermore
, Kyoto showed the weakest score of
passenger
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passengers
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 which is 45 million per day. The
passengers
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passenger's
passengers'
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 number of
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the others
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others
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other
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 four
city was
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cities
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 fluctuated.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway systems
  • date opened
  • kilometres of route
  • passenger numbers per year
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • oldest
  • recent additions
  • route length
  • network
  • transport
  • massive
  • annually
  • comparatively shorter
  • follows closely behind
  • lowest number
  • second highest
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