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the line graph below shows the number of international conferences in three cities

the line graph below shows the number of international conferences in three cities
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The line provided chart illustrates the amount of global discussion held in three cities over a period of 45 years from 1965 to 2010. From an
overall
 perspective, It is readily apparent that there was a dramatic increase in the number of international conferences in downtown C,
whereas
, it can be seen the reversed pattern in
city
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 A and B shown.
To begin
 with
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the
figure
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figures
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 for the international conferences in
city
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cities
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 A and B are
respective
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 about 35% and 30% in 1965,following 10 years, the quantities of both 2 cities leveled off
approximately
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 30% to 29 %. the
last
 period they decreased slightly including 20,25 %
On the other hand
,
it is clear that
 the number of international conferences held in
city
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City
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 C gradually rose
in
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from
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 0% to 30% from 1965 to 1995.Followed by 25% in 2005 and the
last
 period it can be seen rebound about 30%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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