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The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons

The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons
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A glance at the given pie charts depicts the percentages of Brits people who were
students
 at the same university in England and
also
the
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they
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 are able to speak other
languages
 except
English
 in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, in both 2000 and 2010, the highest number of
students
 could speak only Spanish other than
English
.
In contrast
, the lowest number of
students
 could speak German as a second language in these specific years. Moving on to more details, a staggering 30% of the total
students
 were educated only in Spanish in the year 2000. Not only do a negligible 10 % of
English
students
 study two other
languages
, but 10 % of
English
students
also
 study only German in 2000. It is obvious that the highest level of proportion of British
students
 study only Spanish
besides
English
 in 2010 35%.
Moreover
,
second,
in terms of the number of
students
 who were able to speak
languages
 other than
English
, it was related to people who had the capability to speak two other
languages
.
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