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The chart below shows the results of a survey that sampled a cross section of travelers at a major metropolitan airport about the purpose of their trip. The survey was carried out during four different months in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey that sampled a cross section of travelers at a major metropolitan airport about the purpose of their trip. The survey was carried out during four different months in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart above depicts information about the
result
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results
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 of one survey in 2022. The sample was
travelers
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travellers
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 at a big metropolitan airport who asked to
given
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 the reason
of
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for
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 their trip.
Overall
, it can be seen that business was dominating in March and September 2022,
while
 June and December 2022 were dominated by holiday
purpose
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purposes
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To begin
 with, there were as many as 72 per
cent
 who go out for
business
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a business
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 trip. Meanwhile, in June 2022, the workers who did business travel only around 29 per
cent
. After that, the percentage
was increase
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up
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to 53 per
cent
.
Furthermore
, the number
decrease
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 again to 34 per
cent
.
Besides
, in March 2022, people who went
for
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 holiday were 18 per
cent
. Following that, the total number sharply jump to 54 per
cent
.
Next,
significantly slump until
reach
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 31 per
cent
.
At the end
 of the year, the percentage was about 35 per
cent
.
Moreover
, people who visited their family were approximately 6 per
cent
 until December 2022, the number
was continuously fluctuated
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continuously fluctuated
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.
Subsequently
, the percentage of other reasons was very small and
maintain
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 below 10 per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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