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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major citites with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparison where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major citites with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparison where relevant.
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The table chart illustrates details about train routes and their tracks in London,Paris,
Tokyo
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,Washington DC,Kyoto and Los Angeles with starting time, distance travelled and numbers of humans every
year
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 in millions. The most popular trend for folks travelling by public transport was in
Tokyo
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however
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,In Kyoto people use their personal vehicles rather than trains. To commence with, Paris is
on
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second number with 1191
million
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 and
also
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on
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second number in the oldest station in 1900.London started for the first time in 1863 and has the largest distance travel every
year
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 only with 775
million
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 tickets per capita. Kyoto and Los Angeles are the shortest routes with almost 50
million
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 folks per
year
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. The majority of individuals use trains for travel only in
Tokyo
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 with nearly 2000
million
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 folks per
year
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furthermore
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,
its
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 was established after the other two cities in 1927. Interest in using trains in humans most popular in
Tokyo
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 and Paris
although
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, not too famous in the other two railway stations.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tokyo, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway systems
  • date opened
  • kilometres of route
  • passenger numbers per year
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • oldest
  • recent additions
  • route length
  • network
  • transport
  • massive
  • annually
  • comparatively shorter
  • follows closely behind
  • lowest number
  • second highest
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