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The chart below gives information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The current graph,shows the value of tickets on
airline
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airlines
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 between two cities,
hence
 to
this
 graph we can collect all the necessary data.
Overall
,
this
 chart contains information
of
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on
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 4 weeks.We
gonna
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are going to
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 start
discussion
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a discussion
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 with the first
week
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week's
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 prices from Sydney to Melbourne the
price
 was at
the
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its
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 peak on
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Monday
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monday
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Monday
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,
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however
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and howerever
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howerever
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the
 next 3
days
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days'
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 cost remained almost the same,on
friday
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Friday
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 the cost of the tickets improved significantly and went down till the end of
weekend
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the weekend
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. The second chart shows the cost
on
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 the first week from Melbourne to Sydney,on
monday
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Monday
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 the
price
 remained in the range
betweeen
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between
 50-60 dollars but it's in the next 3 days the
price
has
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dropped dramatically,
besides
 that the
price
 on
friday
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Friday
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had
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a huge improvements
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a huge improvement
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 in value getting up to 80 dollars per ticket and that the
price
it's slightly went
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it's slightly going
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 down. To summarize,looking at
this
 chart we can see that
everyday
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every day
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 of
a
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the
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 week
price
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the price
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 fluctuated and wasn't stable.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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