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The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the data about the change in staff's number in the university over the period of 2005 to 2013.
Overall
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, major change can be observed, with
medicine
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 showing a significant increase,
while
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 staff in Agriculture and Education declined.
Also
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 in
medicine
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, the
rate
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 of
teachers
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 and
students
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 was the highest
rate
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 in all of the subjects.
Although
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, in Arts, there is growth of staff,
rate
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 of teacher and student was the worst. In detail, in
medicine
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, the number of
teachers
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 experienced a sharp rise from 30664 to 36868, especially between 2005 and 2013.
While
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 the population decrease in Agriculture and Education by 47 and 334. It was a only decrease in all subjects. In the
rate
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 of teacher and
students
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.
medicine
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 has a similar
rate
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, which was four times more
students
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 than
teachers
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 in medical subjects.
In contrast
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, the Arts subject showed a lack of
teachers
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 than others. arts
students
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 were 12 times higher than
teachers
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medicine, rate, teachers, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • academic staff
  • faculties
  • ratios
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • dominance
  • balance
  • disparities
  • hiring practices
  • overview
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