The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.

The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.
The given chart shows the data about
students
of
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language
skills, categorized by no other
language
, German only, French only, Spanish only, another
language
and above two other
language
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languages
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, in British between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, the growth of proportion can be observed, with the categories about no or two other
language
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languages
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, and another
language
showing
small
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a small
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increase,
while
the others is a downward trend,
excepted
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for
percentage
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a percentage
the percentage
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of
spekaing
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speaking
German. In detail, the
percentage
of the
students
who can speak only
english
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English
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experienced a rise from 30% to 35 %, especially between 2000 and 2010. Interestingly, the
percentage
of the
students
who can speak one another
langauge
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language
or two other
langauge
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language
increase
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to 5% during the same period.
In contrast
, the
students
who can speak only Spanish or French declined, which the
percentage
of them go down by 10% and 5% respectively.
Additionally
, the
percentage
of
the
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German
speaker
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speakers
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remained steady at 10%, which was
a
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only not
changed
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.
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