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The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.

The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.
The given chart shows the data about
students
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of
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language
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 skills, categorized by no other
language
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, German only, French only, Spanish only, another
language
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 and above two other
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language
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languages
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, in British between 2000 and 2010.
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, the growth of proportion can be observed, with the categories about no or two other
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language
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languages
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, and another
language
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 showing
small
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a small
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 increase,
while
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 the others is a downward trend,
excepted
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 for
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of
spekaing
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speaking
 German. In detail, the
percentage
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 of the
students
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 who can speak only
english
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English
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 experienced a rise from 30% to 35 %, especially between 2000 and 2010. Interestingly, the
percentage
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 of the
students
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 who can speak one another
langauge
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language
 or two other
langauge
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language
increase
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 to 5% during the same period.
In contrast
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, the
students
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 who can speak only Spanish or French declined, which the
percentage
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 of them go down by 10% and 5% respectively.
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, the
percentage
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 of
the
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apply
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German
speaker
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speakers
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 remained steady at 10%, which was
a
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the
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 only not
changed
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change
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • students
  • speak
  • languages
  • ability
  • English
  • illustrates
  • increase
  • importance
  • multilingualism
  • global
  • reflecting
  • focus
  • historical
  • learning
  • indicating
  • shift
  • educational
  • priorities
  • diversity
  • access
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