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The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.

The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of students in Britain who can use other
languages
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as well as
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 international language
English
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 in a decade starting from 2000.
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English
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 language was most used in the given time
while
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, German,French and Spanish interest declined over a period. The most common
laguage
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language
 was
English
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 with 30 % in 2000 and increased
with
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 5% in 2010.
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,
number
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 of speakers
are
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 declined slowly in French and Spanish with a loss of 5% in ten years.
In addition
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, only German students showed
same
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 interest in all years remained at 10% same all the time.But all the other
language
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languages
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 inclined slowly and reached 20% and 15% with
a
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an
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increased
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 of 5% each.
At the end
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 of 2010 near about 70 % of
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students
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student
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students
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 used other
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.
To sum up
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,
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 remained at the top in all decades.
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 interest in other
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also
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 increased but a small fall in European
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, english with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • students
  • speak
  • languages
  • ability
  • English
  • illustrates
  • increase
  • importance
  • multilingualism
  • global
  • reflecting
  • focus
  • historical
  • learning
  • indicating
  • shift
  • educational
  • priorities
  • diversity
  • access
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