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The charts below show the proportion of students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportion of students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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This
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 chart shows the proportion of students at a university in England who were able to speak other languages
in addition
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English
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 in the
years
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 2000 and 2010. First of all, it is clearly seen from the chart that there wasn't a dramatic change during the 10
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, except for the people that didn't speak any language other than
English
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 as their numbers decreased by 10 per cent. We can clearly analyse from the pie chart that there is a great number of people speaking Spanish
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English
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 with the percentage being 30 per cent and more during those
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On the other hand
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, we can see that the number of people speaking two other languages and German stayed the same and didn't change for the duration of those
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To conclude
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, the university seems to have a variety of pupils who speak different languages
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English
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 but with that Spanish is the most spoken language among the students.
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