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The charts below show the males and females arrested over 5 years and the reasons for the most recent arrests.

The charts below show the males and females arrested over 5 years and the reasons for the most recent arrests.
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The charts presented illustrate the percentages of men and women arrested over a five-year period ending in 1994 and detail the primary
reasons
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 for these
arrests
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. It is evident from the data that
males
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 were arrested significantly more often than females, with public drinking being the most common reason for
arrests
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 among both genders. Over the specified period, 32% of
males
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 were arrested compared to only 9% of females, indicating a higher propensity for arrest among
males
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. Despite
males
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 constituting a larger fraction of the arrested population, neither gender approached or exceeded the halfway mark, meaning the majority of both genders were not arrested. In terms of the
reasons
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 for
arrests
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, public drinking was the predominant cause, accounting for 31% of male
arrests
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 and an even higher 38% of female
arrests
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. Drunk driving was the second most common cause
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arrests
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 among
males
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 at 26%,
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 it was less common among females, at only 14%.
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, the categories
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 "Other
reasons
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" encompassed approximately 19% of male
arrests
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 and 18% of female
arrests
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, indicating a variety of less frequent causes. Notably, under 10% of individuals from both genders chose not to disclose the reason for their arrest.
This
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 data underscores significant gender differences in arrest patterns and
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, with
males
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 more frequently encountering legal issues, particularly related to alcohol consumption.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, arrests, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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