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The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the portions of
Carbohydrates
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,
protein
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 and Fat in various diets a human consumes.
Overall
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, the Average
diet
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 consists of the same amount of
carbohydrates
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 and
protein
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, Where half of the amount of each is fat.
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, in a healthy
diet
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carbohydrates
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 are in
a
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 vast majority,
protein
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 comes second and fat at
last
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as well as
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 in a healthy
diet
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 for sport with a slight difference in the amount of all three nutrients.
Firstly
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, the Average
diet
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 contains 40%
protein
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, 40%
carbohydrates
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 and 20% fat.
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, Half of the healthy
diet
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 is comprised of
carbohydrates
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 and the rest half is divided into 30%
protein
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 and 20%.
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, a Healthy
diet
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 for sports people is mainly made up of
carbohydrates
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 which are 60% of the
diet
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 and
protein
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 is responsible for 25%. The remaining 15% is all fat.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrates, protein, diet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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