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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both attitudes and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there are many options available to each person. Some like to try new
things
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 as places to visit and a variety of
food
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,
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 others prefer to do
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 that are familiar
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 them.
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 both types of people have justifiable reasons, as far as I am concerned, one should try new
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.
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, individuals seek excitement and want to build new relationships through their experience.
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, visiting unfamiliar places gives a person opportunities to find shops selling clothes that cannot be found in their local area. If they bought them, it would give them precious memory and
excitment
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excitement
 to wear them. In terms of trying new
food
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, one could make more international friends.
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, if a person lives in a shared house with
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multi nationalities
multi-nationalities
multinational ties
, they can share their traditional
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 in the house.
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 would help them to build their relationships and
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 is why people like to try new
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, some prefer to repeat doing
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 they are familiar
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 is because they are afraid of making mistakes.
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, fussy eaters tend to eat the same dish wherever they go because if the
food
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 is not their cup of tea, they might be
disapointed
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disappointed
 by the whole experience.
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, it is a fact that travelling
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to new
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 places could lead
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to challenging
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 situations
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 as finding a safe hotel in the country with having a language
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barrier
.
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 could be very hard for some to cope with,
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, they tend to do
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 that are familiar
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 them.
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, despite the fact that both opinions are understandable and should be respected, I personally prefer to try new
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 because it gives me excitement and helps me to make more friends. Even if I encounter difficulties, it gives me an opportunity to grow myself by
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overcoming
 those challenges.

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task achievement
Great job presenting both sides of the argument and clearly stating your opinion. To improve, make sure to avoid minor grammatical errors, such as 'disapointed' which should be 'disappointed' and 'multinationalities' which could be better stated as 'people of different nationalities.'
coherence cohesion
For better clarity, ensure all sentences are well-structured and transitions between paragraphs are smoother. For example, 'visiting unfamiliar places gives a person opportunities to find shops selling clothes that cannot be found in their local area' could be simplified for better understanding.
task achievement
The introduction clearly outlines the topic and your stance, making it easy for the reader to follow your arguments.
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You used specific examples to support your points, such as the scenario of sharing food in a multinational household, which adds depth to your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and reinforces your opinion, which leaves a strong final impression.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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