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The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the distribution of university academic
staff
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 based on
courses
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 in a particular country between 2005 and 2013.
Overall
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, employees in all subjects showed an increasing quantity from 2005 to 2013, except agriculture and education.
While
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 the arts
subject
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 had the largest comparison between the
number
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 of
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teacher
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teachers
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 and
student
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students
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,
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medicine
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the medicine
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subject
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 had the tiniest quantity contrast between the
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teacher
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teachers
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 and
student
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students
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. In 2005, the
number
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 of
medicine
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staff
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 was 30,664 and it increased to 36,868
staff
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 by 2013, making it the largest increment among other
courses
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.
Following
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this
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, the
number
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 of business
staff
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 was 23128 which
then
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 rose to 28,769 by 2013.
In contrast
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, the remaining
courses
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 had just below 20,000
staff
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 with agriculture workers
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only 1,680 in 2005. By 2013,
while
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 the
number
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 of business and
medicine
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staff
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 climbed to more than 22,000, the
number
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 of
staff
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 in the other subjects remained under 20,000. Moving to the comparison of
teacher
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 and student
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number
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numbers
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 in 2013, in
arts
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an arts
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subject
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, one
teacher
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 was compared to 12 students, making it the largest gap.
Following
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this
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, the teachers of architecture, sciences, and humanities
courses
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 had
the
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similar
comparabililty
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comparability
 to their students, which are 1:11.
On the other hand
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, the
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subject
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subjects
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 of business, agriculture, and education showed a comparison between an educator to scholars were below 10.
Conversely
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,
medicine
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course
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courses
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 had the least juxtaposition of an educator to their students which is only 1:4.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "following this, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words staff, courses, subject, number, teacher, medicine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • academic staff
  • faculties
  • ratios
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • dominance
  • balance
  • disparities
  • hiring practices
  • overview
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