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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph illustrates how inhabitants Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia
living
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 in
cities
 between 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, there was an increase in the proportion of
population
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the population
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 living in
cities
 in all countries, being given
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the most dramatic use in the
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 for Malaysia through the period. The shore of people
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living
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 in
cities
 in Malaysia started at 30%, after which it experienced a rise with 25% in 2020, before expected at 80% and 81% from 2030 to 2040. The same changes
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 seen in the
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figure
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 for Indonesia with 14% at the beginning of the period, followed by a significant increase to 80% in 2030 and predicted a
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continuous
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 growth to 2030 and 2040 with 60% and 62%, respectively. Roughly 10% of people living in
cities
 in Thailand in 1970, with a subsequent fluctuation in the range from 21% to 30% between 1980 and 2020, a final rise was predicted to 40% in 2030 and 45% in 2040.
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, the
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figure
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 for
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 started at 31%, followed by a fluctuation between 32% and 43% from 1980 to 2020, before
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the expected
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a
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increase to 48% and 53% in 2030 and 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban population
  • Trend analysis
  • Urbanization rate
  • Economic development
  • Rural-urban migration
  • Infrastructure
  • Socio-economic events
  • Stagnation
  • Anomalies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Predictive analysis
  • Geographical aspects
  • Government policies
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