The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the changes
on
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in
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the figures
of
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for
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shops
that closed and opened. In 2011, the
number
of
shop
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shops
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newly opened was much higher about 2000, but it dropped to under 4000. After 2011, the
number
of closed
shops
are
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is
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shown higher than opening
shops
from 2012 to 2014.
However
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it fell back to under 1000. It appeared the lowest figure on the graph during the period. Closed
shops
rised
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rose
risen
rise
steadily after 2015, so that the
number
of them exceeded the
number
of opening
shops
. The difference between opening and closed
shops
was
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exists, but the
number
of closed
shops
remained greater from 2016 to 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • fluctuation
  • correlation
  • inverse relationship
  • notable
  • comparable
  • speculate
  • external factors
  • increment
  • decrement
  • overall
  • composite
  • linear
  • net gain
  • net loss
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