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The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.

The diagram illustrates the proportions of students in Britain who have the ability to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.
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The
chrts
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charts
chart
shows
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 the amount of British
students
 in a university being able to speak
language
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a language
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 except
English
 in 2000 and 2010 respectively. In summary, the number of
students
 who can speak
Spanish
 is the
hightest
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highest
 of all time over the decades,
while
 more
students
 tend to be able to use language other than
English
 to communicate. In 2000, one-third of British
students
can
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could
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 speak only
English
 and
Spanish
. Followed by only
french
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French
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 and other languages with 15
percent
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per cent
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.
Besides
, 1-in-5
students
 only know
English
 but no other languages. When it comes to 2010, the percentage of
studentwho
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students who
knows
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know
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 only
English
 and
Spanish
 has
sightly
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slightly
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 increased to 35
percent
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per cent
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,
while
students
 who only know
English
has
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have
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fall
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fallen
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 from 2-in-10 to 1-in-10
student
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students
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 when
compaired
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compared
 to the number of
student
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students
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 in 2000.
Also
, a fifth of
student
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students
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 are able to speak
language
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languages
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 other than German,
Spanish
 or French.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, english, spanish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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