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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (C02) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (C02) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The following graph illustrates
mean
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 CO2 emissions for each adult in
the
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Sweden
, Italy, Portugal, and UK in the timeline from 1967 to 2007
Overall
, the United Kingdom was much better in most of the time until 2007. The United Kingdom has a downfall;meanwhile, others have increased As seen from the diagram, in the beginning, the UK has a major average carbon emissions account of nearly 1,
while
Sweden
 has almost 8
tonnes
.
However
, the British fell until the end of 2007,when
Sweden
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raised
rise
risen
rised
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rose
 but decreased to approximately 6
tonnes
 As the graph shows, Italy
initially
has
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 4,but in the
future
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 the situation going
to
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opposite
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direcrion becuse
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direction because
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Italy
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emision
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emission
emissions
 significantly skyrocketed to about 8. In the same year,
the
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 Portugal
toched
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touched
 the bottom with a little below 2
tonnes
 and
then
 it
also
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 in the next years because the
intersect
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 line of
Sweden
 with 6
in
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meter
tonnes
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