Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacation. Give the advantages of both and express your own point of view.
It is argued if
childeren
should be given short multiple Correct your spelling
children
vacations
or just one long period vacation
. People have a
different Correct article usage
apply
opinion
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opinions
with
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about
this
nation some believe whereas
other
do not. Fix the agreement mistake
others
This
essay will discuss the pros of both ideas.
To begin
with, have
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having
an
short period Change the article
a
vacations
for several time
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times
it
play a significant role Correct pronoun usage
apply
on
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in
children
psyches. Change noun form
children's
Morever
, if Correct your spelling
Moreover
children
stayed
for a long time Wrong verb form
stay
with
school pressure and homework strains can highly affect their ability to understand a new lesson or subject. Change preposition
under
However
, exposed to multiple breaks will enhanace
the capability of getting new information and improve the education level. Correct your spelling
enhance
In addition
, students can refresh themselves and stayed
motivated Change the verb form
stay
in
the whole semester. A recent studyChange preposition
for
,
showed that Remove the comma
apply
childrent
who are taking Correct your spelling
children
a
multiple Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
vacations
at shcool
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school
more
passionated Add a missing verb
are more
then
others.
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than
On the other hand
, expressing a one long vacations
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vacation
showing
an essential impact on Wrong verb form
shows
children
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children's
talenet
. Correct your spelling
talent
Furthermore
, long vacations
allows
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allow
children
to enjoy their time on
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apply
practiseing
their hobbies. Correct your spelling
practising
In addition
, Add an article
the student
a student
student
can join a summer camp and Fix the agreement mistake
students
learening
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learning
a now crucial habits
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now crucial habits
a now crucial habit
in
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during
this
long vacation
. However
, they can reliase
their interest and work on improving their hobbies. Correct your spelling
relieve
Otherwhies
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Otherwise
children
are unable to emphases on
their interest with all school Correct your spelling
emphasise
presurre
and Correct your spelling
pressure
homeworks
.
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homework
To conclude
, it is a contraversial
topic Correct your spelling
controversial
while
people have a different mentality. In my opinion
both nations have a good Add a comma
opinion,
impcat
on Correct your spelling
impact
childrent
. Correct your spelling
children
In
addition
expressing Add a comma
addition,
to
long Change preposition
apply
vacation
can help Fix the agreement mistake
vacations
in
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with
children
hobbies progression. Change noun form
children's
However
, getting a short repatitive
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repetitive
vacation
perevent shcool
burnout and Correct your spelling
prevents school
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a mesirable
mesirable
life.Correct your spelling
miserable
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