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Your next-door neighbour likes to listen music late at night. Because of the loud music, you often loose sleep. Write a letter to building manager. In your letter •describe the situation •explain the problems its causing you. •offer atleast one solution

#neighbour #music #night #manager #•describe #situation #•explain #•offer #atleast
Dear Mr. Clintoff, As the resident of flat #321
in
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 Marbella Grand Ave, I am writing to you to bring to your attention a problem
me
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 and my family
is
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 facing
due to
this
 new tenant that moved
in
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 flat #322.
This
 gentleman likes to play music till late at night which results in the following challenges we face.
Firstly
, my wife and I are not able to get a good healthy sleep and sometimes
get
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 late for work which is often early morning.
Additionally
, our kids
also
 can’t go to bed on time as well
due to
 the distraction it causes. We tried to cope
up
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with it but
eventually
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 it’s getting a bit harsh for us to manage. Might I recommend you
to
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write to the resident about the problems we are facing and offer a solution that reaches a mutual understanding
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 I would advise them to reduce the volume of the music they listen to as it alleviates most of the challenges faced by us and probably other
neighbors
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. As the manager of the building, your understanding is highly appreciated.
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complete response
The letter could be more specific about the times when the neighbor plays music, which would provide a clearer picture of the issue.
suitable writing tone
Including more formal language and polite expressions could elevate the tone even further.
complete response
The letter clearly states the problem and its impact on the writer and their family.
logical structure
The structure of the letter is logical, with clear paragraphs dedicated to each point.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph clearly focuses on a single idea, making the letter easy to follow.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate, with a polite and respectful tone.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is suitable for a formal letter, showing respect and politeness.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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