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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one untiversity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one untiversity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The provided pie charts compare the
number
 of British
students
 who possess the ability to speak foreign
languages
 at one university in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, Spanish was the language with the most speakers in both years,
meanwhile
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 German
languages
 and two other
languages
 were
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spoken the least. Spanish was spoken by most
students
 at the university during 2000 and 2010,
acounting
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accounting
30
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% and 35% respectively. The
number
 of
student
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students
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 speaking another language increased from 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2010.
Likewise
, French speakers started with 15%
in
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 the beginning of the period, it dropped to only 10% in 2010.
Also
,
students
 with no ability to speak foreign
languages
 had a decrease. Starting with 20% in 2000 and fell to just
a
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half of its
initialnumber
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initial number
initial numbers
. The
number
 of
students
 speaking German and two other
languages
 had the same exact
number
 and was the lowest
percentages
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 among all the categories, which was 10%.
This
number
 remained steady until 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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