You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college. In your letter •explain your accommodation requirements •explain what your food needs are •ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I'm writing to enquire about the facilities available in your college hostel complex. I have enrolled on the MBA program which is scheduled to commence in May 2025 is offered by the postgraduate faculty. I'm a
Srilankan
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Sri Lankan
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student and
a new comers
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new comers
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to
UK
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the UK
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so I would like to stay in a double room
that is
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shared with a student who is from Sri Lanka because It would help me to get rid of
homesick
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.
Further
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, we are starting our semester in the summer, I would prefer to have an air conditioning facility in my room.
In addition
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, I am a South Asian student who always follows cultural norms and often prefers
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vegetarian foods
than
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Western foods.
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, I would like to have inside food
than
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outside foods as a
finance saving
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strategy. I would be grate
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if you could provide me with the available rooms and the diet plan unless the above request can not be fulfilled. I look forward to
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from you. Yours faithfully, Aravinda
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better clarity. In your letter, the accommodation and food requirements could be split into separate paragraphs for better readability.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistent formal tone throughout the letter. While your tone is generally appropriate, there are some minor informal elements.
complete response
Try to further elaborate the specific needs or reasons when requesting alternatives. Providing additional context can help in achieving a more complete response.
complete response
You have covered all the required points: accommodation requirements, food needs, and asking for alternatives.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are perfect and adhere to formal letter-writing conventions.
logical structure
The letter is mostly well-structured and the flow is logical.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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