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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

#work #company #six #months #head #office #country #manager
Dear head of manager I am writing to
aske
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ask
 you about shifting my work location to head office in Tehran
,
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 because I have
accept
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 in
training
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a training
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 course in Tehran
according
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 half time education.
This
 course is for 6 months and will begin
from
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 April 3 th l would like to point out
this
 course is important for my practical
skill
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 in our company.
On the other hand
, there are 4
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 colleagues in our company who can do my tasks very well and have already talked to them about replacing me. I would
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 if you consent whit my request and let me
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this
 suggestion. since you are caring both for
company
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my company
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 and me, I hope you approve my request.
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tank
titank
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Thank
 you very much for your help in
this
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subject
sublect
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subject
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lo0k
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look
 forward
about
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 your reply Best wishes Ali Saremi
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grammar
Improve sentence structure and grammar for better clarity.
structure
Write clear paragraphs with single ideas for better readability.
detail
Provide more detailed information about how the work arrangement can be managed.
clarity
The writer clearly states the duration and purpose of the intended stay at the head office.
tone
The closing is polite and shows gratitude, which is appropriate for a formal request letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional advancement
  • cross-cultural collaboration
  • headquarters/ head office
  • global perspective
  • remote work
  • temporary assignment
  • team dynamics
  • networking opportunities
  • cultural immersion
  • succession planning
  • collaborative tools
  • time zone coordination
  • corporate hierarchy
  • relocation logistics
  • work-life balance
  • multinational environment
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