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The table shows the proportion of people in England who agree with same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of people in England who agree with same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the
percentage
 of England citizens who
accept
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to
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apply
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same-gender
marriage
 between 1989 to 2013 based on five different types of
religion
.
Overall
, it is evident that the rate of individuals who agree with
the
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apply
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homosexual
marriage
 across all
religion
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religious
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 groups showed an upward trend throughout the
period
. In 1989, there was a similar
percentage
 in the
religion
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religious
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 groups of Church of England, Roman
Chatolic
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Catholic
, and Other
Christian
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Christians
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, the rate of individuals who confirmed positively to
the
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apply
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same-sex
marriage
 was only 9%.
Then
, all these proportions grew significantly to more than 30% by 2007. The numbers rose to more than 51% by 2013, with Roman Catholic's
percentage
climbed
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 to more than 60% of their total followers who agree with the same-gender
marriage
 concept. On the other side,
majority
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the majority
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 of
Non-Christian
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non-Christian
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 people disagreed with
the
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apply
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same-sex
marriage
 in 1989, amounting to only 5%.
This
 number,
however
, gradually climbed to 19% by 2007 and reached 30% by the end of the
period
.
Conversely
, there was 20% of
No-
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the No-Religion
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Religion
 group of people
who
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apply
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accepted
the
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apply
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homosexual
marriage
 in the first
period
 of time. It
kept
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apply
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rose to more than half by 2001 and peaked at 77% by 2013, making it the highest
percentage
 across all
religion
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religious
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 groups throughout the
period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, marriage, religion, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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