The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart compares the consumer goods expenditure of

France

and

United

Correct article usage

the United

show examples

Kingdom in 2010.

Overall

it can be clearly observed that the

expense

Fix the agreement mistake

expenses

show examples

Correct article usage

the UK

show examples

Correct subject-verb agreement

are

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higher than

France

, except

computers

Change preposition

for computers

show examples

and

perfume

that

Correct word choice

apply

show examples

the trends are different. The

people spend the most money

for

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cars, books,

computers

, cameras and

perfume

respectively.

However

, Frenchs use

their

Correct pronoun usage

them

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for cars,

computers

, books,

perfume

and cameras

sucessively

Correct your spelling

successively

. To compare the trend that in

and

France

consume cars the most.

While

the second

goods

Fix the agreement mistake

good

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is different,

people buy

computers

more than

Frenchs

Correct your spelling

French

show examples

. Even though cameras

very

Add a missing verb

are very

show examples

popular in

Correct article usage

the UK

show examples

but

Correct word choice

apply

show examples

it is the least popular in

France

. The least

consuming

Wrong verb form

consumed

show examples

good in

is the

perfume

surprisingly.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, computers, perfume with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

115 words

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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