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The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart compares the consumer goods expenditure of
France
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 and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in 2010.
Overall
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 it can be clearly observed that the
expense
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expenses
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 of
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UK
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the UK
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is
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are
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 higher than
France
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, except
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computers
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for computers
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 and
perfume
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that
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apply
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the trends are different. The
UK
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 people spend the most money
for
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on
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 cars, books,
computers
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, cameras and
perfume
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 respectively.
However
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, Frenchs use
their
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them
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 for cars,
computers
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, books,
perfume
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 and cameras
sucessively
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successively
. To compare the trend that in
UK
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 and
France
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 consume cars the most.
While
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 the second
goods
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good
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 is different,
UK
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 people buy
computers
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 more than
Frenchs
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French
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. Even though cameras
very
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are very
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 popular in
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UK
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the UK
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,
but
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apply
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it is the least popular in
France
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. The least
consuming
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consumed
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 good in
UK
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 is the
perfume
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 surprisingly.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, computers, perfume with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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