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The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart compares the consumer goods expenditure of
France
 and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in 2010.
Overall
 it can be clearly observed that the
expense
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expenses
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 of
UK
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the UK
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is
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are
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 higher than
France
, except
computers
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for computers
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 and
perfume
that
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apply
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the trends are different. The
UK
 people spend the most money
for
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on
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 cars, books,
computers
, cameras and
perfume
 respectively.
However
, Frenchs use
their
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them
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 for cars,
computers
, books,
perfume
 and cameras
sucessively
Correct your spelling
successively
. To compare the trend that in
UK
 and
France
 consume cars the most.
While
 the second
goods
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good
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 is different,
UK
 people buy
computers
 more than
Frenchs
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French
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. Even though cameras
very
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are very
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 popular in
UK
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the UK
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,
but
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apply
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it is the least popular in
France
. The least
consuming
Wrong verb form
consumed
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 good in
UK
 is the
perfume
 surprisingly.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, computers, perfume with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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