The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age group Iin2002. It includes those with a degree, whose with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications.
The graph shows the weekly
earnings
of full-time graduate employees by age
and type of degree
in 2002. It compares those with a higher degree
, those with a first degree
, and those with other qualifications
.
Overall
, graduates
with a higher degree
earned the most across all age
groups
, while
those with other qualifications
earned the least. For all groups
, earnings
increased as age
increased, peaking between the ages of 36-40, and then
slightly declined in the older age
groups
. For graduates
with higher degrees, their earnings
started around £500 at age
21-25 and rose sharply, reaching over £800 at age
36-40. After
this
peak, their earnings
slowly declined, but there was a noticeable increase again at age
56-60.
Those with first degrees followed a similar trend but earned less. Their earnings
started around £450 at age
21-25, reaching just below £700 by age
36-40. After
this
, earnings
remained stable, with slight fluctuations, and ended near £600 for those aged 56-60. Graduates
with other qualifications
earned the least throughout. They started around £400 at age
21-25 and peaked at about £600 in the 36-40 age
range. Their earnings
remained fairly stable but lower than the other two groups
for the rest of the age
groups
.
In conclusion, graduates
with higher degrees had the highest earnings
, followed by first-degree
holders, while
those with other qualifications
consistently earned the least.Submitted by acaitaz on
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