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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table and pie charts above display the sources and the distribution of
police
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the police
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budget
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 in Britain from 2017 to 2018. The table shows that
although
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 other items
reamamined
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remained
 steady, the growth in local raxes significantly increased
total
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the total
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budget
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. Meanwhile, in either
years
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year
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 salaries were the biggest
expenses
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expense
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. In 2017,
three quarters
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three-quarters
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 of the
budget
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 were spent on salaries for officers and staff, which slightly declined to 69% in the next year.
Consequently
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, the percentage of technology
expense
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expenses
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 increased
form
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from
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 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018. As for the money spent on buildings and transport, in the two years were both 17%. The situation of
budget
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 sources was similar, in which only a few items presented remarkable variations.
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, the local taxes in 2017
was
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were
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 91.2m, but in the next
year
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year,
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 it grew by over 10% to 102.3m, which directly elevated the total in 2018 to 318.6m, in comparison to 304.7m in the previous year. Regarding
to
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apply
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other sources and
national
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the national
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 government, the changes were negligible.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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