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The graph below depicts the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie charts below shows how electricity is used in an average home in the same country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make cmparison where relevant.

The graph below depicts the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie charts below shows how electricity is used in an average home in the same country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make cmparison where relevant.
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The line chart shows the average depletion of electricity in
winter
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 and summer. Another pie chart illustrates various purposes for employing power in every household. Overview, people use more amount of electricity in a day in
winter
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 than in summer, and
also
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 most of the energy is applied to heating.
According to
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 the search, a large amount of power is used from 9
pm
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. to 12
pm
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, which are rush hours. There are nearly 50000
units
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 in
winter
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 and almost 20000
units
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.
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, the number of 12
pm
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.- 3
pm
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. in
winter
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(40000
units
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) is twice as many as in summer(20000
units
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). Concerning another diagram, a substantial amount of electricity is employed in heating rooms, and scalding water with a percentage of 52.5%, followed by kitchen appliances and the washing machine, which account for 17.5%.
Next,
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either electronic devices,
such
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 as TVs, and radios, or cleansers, food mixers, and electric tools both constitute an equivalent figure of 15%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words winter, pm, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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