The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relecant.
The figure illustrates the manufacturing process of instant noodles. There are eight stages in the process, beginning with the production of
dough
from the mixture of flour, water, and oil. The dough
is then
shaped into discs before they are being
fried and packed into cups with the condimentsUnnecessary verb
apply
,
and Remove the comma
apply
finally
labeled
and sealed to be distributed to the market.
Change the spelling
labelled
Firstly
, flour is stored in storage silos before it is delivered to the mixer, in which it is being mixed with oil and water to create dough
. The dough
is then
put on a roller machine
to make a
Correct article usage
apply
dough
sheets. The next steps involve a machine
that cuts the dough
sheets into strips,
before they are shaped into noodle discs.
Remove the comma
apply
The following step is
transferring the noodle discs to a drying machine
to cook them using oil. The dried noodles are then
put into cups with vegetables and spices. Furthermore
, they are passed to the labelling machine
, followed by the sealing process and finally
ready to be distributed to the market.Submitted by averinasandra on
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