The pie chart below shows the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008.
The above two pie
chart
Fix the agreement mistake
charts
reveals
data on the proportion of people in different occupations with Correct subject-verb agreement
reveal
a
Change the article
an
aged
range between 23 to 65 in Replace the word
age
UK
town ( Correct article usage
a UK
Ashby
) compared it
to the whole Correct pronoun usage
apply
UK
citizens in the year 2008.
The most significant feature is the percentage of personal service was the highest among in Ashby
town. While the
strongest score in Correct word choice
The
whole
Correct article usage
the whole
UK
was related to office worker
and personal service. Fix the agreement mistake
workers
Furthermore
, the weakest score in Ashby
was the professional work and unemployed,construction works
in the Replace the word
workers
UK
as a whole.
It is noticeable that the number of people who are employees in professional and technical jobs shows
dramatically Verb problem
has
grew
from 9 and 8 in Wrong verb form
grown
Ashby
to 17 and 14 on
Change preposition
in
whole
Correct article usage
the whole
UK
. In contrast
, the percentage of construction and unemployed are sharply decline
from 16,14 in Wrong verb form
declined
Ashby
to 10 in the UK
. However
, office and shop workers remained stable with the same range 18
to 19 and 14 to 13.Change preposition
of 18
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, ashby with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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