The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart compares the number of
men
and
women
who had
further
education qualifications in Australia in 1999.
Overall
, there was a major difference between
men
and
women
who had
skilled
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a skilled
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vocational
diploma
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diplomas
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and there was a quite similar number of
men
and
women
with bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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. The percentage of
men
with skilled vocational
diploma
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diplomas
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, postgraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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, and master's
degree
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degrees
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were notably higher than
women
with more than 50% in each
qualifications
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qualification
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. 90% of
men
possessed
diploma
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a diploma
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in vocational school, and there were roughly 10% of
women
with the same qualification.
Similarly
,
men
had
higher
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a higher
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percentage of postgraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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accounting
to
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for
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almost three quarters and only half as much of
women
had the same qualification. The male population had 20% more than female for master's
degree
with 60%.
In contrast
, the number of
women
with undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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and bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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was higher than males. There were 70% of
women
who had undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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, with
men
having only half of the percentage.
Additionally
,
women
with bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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accounted more than
men
with 50%, just 5% more than
men
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, diploma, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • levels
  • post-school qualifications
  • proportion
  • men
  • women
  • held
  • clear gender disparity
  • Certificate I
  • Certificate II
  • Certificate III
  • Certificate IV
  • Diploma or Higher
  • highest proportion
  • decreases
  • overall
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