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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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indicates
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 how
much
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 electricity
units
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 were produced using fuel
source
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sources
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 in
Australia
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 and
France
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 over a twenty-year period between 1980 and 2020.
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, it is obviously seen that at the beginning of the
period
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period,
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 major resources (
cool
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coal
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 and natural gas)
used
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were used
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 in both
Australia
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 and
France
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. End of the period the overwhelming majority source was cool in
Australia
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 and nuclear power was in
France
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. Getting back to the details
that
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hefty resource was used
cool
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in
Australia
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 between 1980 and 2000. The figures were 50 and 130
units
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 respectively. The second popular resource was
hydro power
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hydropower
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 in
Australia
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. The indicators were 20
units
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 in 1980, and 36
units
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 in 2000. Interestingly,
Australia
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 has reduced Oil and natural gas use
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 than 90% compared with 1980. With regard to
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France
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France,
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 the percentages of fuel
resource
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resources
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 used in 1980 were cool and natural gas in both 25
units
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.
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, in 2000 using nuclear power increased dramatically from 15 to 126
units
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 within 20 year-periods.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, australia, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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