The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates, aged 20-24, in one European country over a two-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates, aged 20-24, in one European country over a two-year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of graduates who do not have a job between 20 to 24 , in one European country in separate eight
months
from 2088 to 2009. At first glance, it is obvious the total unemployment of graduates increased during these two years.
First,
men's percentage started by 10 per cent in Jan 08. It had a slight fall in seven
months
.
However
, in October of 2008, the percentage reached around 17 per cent which means they had a sharp increase in only 3 calendar
months
. Later, in the next year, the number of boys who were unemployed
were
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approximately 23 per cent.
second,
the women who always did a job in 2088 and 2009 were more than men. Statistically, in all 8
months
, the proportion of girls was under half of men except in July of 2009.
Overall
, all the changes for both genders were the same. Clearly, in the first statistics they faced with drop
then
the chart saw more unemployment until the
last
month of the chart.
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