The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The supplied bar chart illustrates how many Australian
post-school
qualified
in
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various rates and
also
the percentage of
men
and
women
who organised them in 1999. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest number of
post-school
qualification
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qualifications
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is for
men
in
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skilled vocational
diploma
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diplomas
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.
However
,
women
did not
qualified
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in
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skilled
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vocational
diploma
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diplomas
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as much as
other
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in other
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parts
in
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Australia
over the period. In 1999, the proportion of qualifications for skilled vocational
diploma
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diplomas
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for
men
was considerably more than
women
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for women
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in the same
post-school
qualifications in
Australia
at 90% and 10%, respectively. ( which were the highest and lowest amount of
post-school
qualifications over the whole year).
Furthermore
, the proportion of qualified
post-school
for
men
bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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was a bit as much as
women
in
Australia
at 45% and 50%, respectively.
Moreover
, the number of
women
in
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undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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was 70% which was twice more than
men
in the same group
that
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was 35% in
Australia
in 1999.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words post-school, men, women, diploma, australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • levels
  • post-school qualifications
  • proportion
  • men
  • women
  • held
  • clear gender disparity
  • Certificate I
  • Certificate II
  • Certificate III
  • Certificate IV
  • Diploma or Higher
  • highest proportion
  • decreases
  • overall
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