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The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart provided the
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 of men and women who studied six related art topics at Unıted Kingdom in 2011 . it can be seen from the diagram that
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female has superior some art-related issues respectively English language and literature ,linguistics,philosophy,history and archaeology and communication and media stub.İn addition , English language and communication and media stub which females outnumber
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 by about 10
per
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 cent .
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 the participation of
number
 at
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 was more
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males
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 in philosophy , the
number
 of
famales
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females
families
 and
males
 has English language and literature most
dramaticly
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 popular . In 2011, the
number
 of
males
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 art and design more than the females than 50
males
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 at UK
university
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 in 2011, respectively , 175 and 150 .
Overall
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number
 of male and female students studying six -
art related
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 eras at a UK university in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • gender distribution
  • imbalance
  • participation
  • trend
  • highlight
  • significant
  • relatively balanced
  • disparity
  • societal factors
  • career opportunities
  • art-related subjects
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • determine
  • discuss
  • cultural influences
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