People use the Internet for medical advice and to do medical check ups rather than directly meeting with doctors in an office. Why are they using the Internet for this? Is it a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, many people
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teens,
adult
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adults
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and even seniors google their
symptoms
, medical
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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and
check ups
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checkups
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on the internet rather than meeting the
docters
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doctors
. Why is
this
? It's easy and
its
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also
very cheap (or no cost at all).
However
,
this
can cause many problems and concerns
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the patient. Many people
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this
time tend to be lazy or busy. Many teens refused to go out of their house or even their room. Adults are
also
very busy in modern days. They work hours on end trying to get money for their family in
this
economy. Modern grownups
also
prefer to have some
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for
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their own after all the busy work. Many seniors dislike going to the hospital because
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a bit
of a chore for them. In
this
economy, money is everything.
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time, everything is expensive, they need to spend less amount
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money as possible. Going to the
doctors
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means they have to pay for
the
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gas,
the
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checkups,
medicine
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. It
also
causes
for
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the parents or
worker
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to lose their working time in some cases. So, the solution to
this
is; Googling your
symptoms
.
Although
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fast and cheap, it may not be accurate. Some of them
over exaggerated
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the disease which causes panic. Most of them are fake or not 100% true. In conclusion, using the internet to google your
symptoms
is not that ethical.
Although
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easier and cheaper, it causes a more negative impact on you
due to
the inaccuracy and exaggeration.
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you can use them to scratch the surface of the disease
your
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having but don't guarantee them.
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Work on further developing your ideas. For example, elaborate on why Googling symptoms can cause panic or give examples of fake medical information.
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The introduction clearly outlines the topic and provides reasons why people use the internet for medical advice.
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The conclusion summarizes the points effectively and provides a clear stance that using the internet for medical advice has more negative impacts.

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