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The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph demonstrates the teaching
hours
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 for every teacher per year in four various countries in 2001.
Overall
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, it is obvious that work
hours
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 were dominant in the USA for all teachers,
whereas
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 Japan showed fewer lesson
hours
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 for three types of education. Looking at the chart more closely, one can see that the USA had the highest number of teaching
hours
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 with an average of 1100 per teacher.
Furthermore
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, Ireland followed the USA with an average of 700
hours
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 of teaching per year. On the other side, Japan worked annually 600
hours
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 which is noticeably the lowest among all the countries.
Moreover
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, Spain had 650 teaching
hours
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 which is the third highest rate.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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