The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities form 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities form 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives data on the percentage of
population
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the population
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living in
cities
in the period of 50 years, particularly from 1970 to 2020 with
projection
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projections
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for 2030 and 2040 in 4 different states of Asia, namely
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia and Thailand,
as well as
Indonesia.
Overall
, the ratio of dwellers living in
cities
rather than rural areas grew in all 4 countries.
Moreover
, the percentage in 3 countries experienced only an upward trend, meanwhile in Phillippiness amount of people suddenly decreased in
middle
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years despite increasing in
a
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total number in the end.
In addition
, the maximum of the projection is expected in Malaysia,
while
the minimum will be in Thailand. Just below 10% of local people preferred to live in big
cities
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Indonesia in 1970,
furthermore
, it is the lowest result in the provided picture.
However
, after a gradual increase over the years, predictions for 2040 show that about 60% of
population
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the population
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will live in various
cities
there. Approximately 20% of the population of Thailand chose
city
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the city
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lifestyle over the rural one in 1970 but after a noticeable
rise
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rise,
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their number is going to be equal to almost 45%.
Altough
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, in comparison with other countries more than 30% of
Philippines'
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the Philippines'
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society was living in
cities
, their amount is not projected to change a lot as the ratio is forecasted to constitute around 50%. A sharp surge was seen in Malaysia where the indicator was equal to exactly 30% but is
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to peak at nearly 90% in 2040.
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