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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the
chart
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 provided data on the
energy
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 consumed in the perıod five years from 2008 to 2030 respectively ,
petrol
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 and
oil
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 , coal , natural gas,nuclear,solar/wind and
hydropower
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 .
Firstly
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 , the
chart
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depicts
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shows
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 that before 2008 , the number of
petrol
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 and
oil
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 was one of the top , the second place shows coal and natural gas ,which same consumed . At the same time , Amout of nuclear and solar /wind and
hydropower
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 ,which was very little different between them , that known as green
energy
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 ,which
the
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a
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total
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totals
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approximately
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 10
quadrianlion
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quadrillion
 unıt.
Secondly
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 , the
chart
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 information
show
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shows
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 after 2008 , when the number of
petrol
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 and
oil
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will
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apply
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consumption
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is
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higher than other
energy
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 sources , coal and natural gas will increase between them and coal will be the winner.
An
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The
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 amount of nuclear and solar/wind
energy
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 sources
according to
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 the
chart
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 will be increasing a little bit .
The
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Hydropower
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hydropower
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 will same consumed between 2008 to 2030 . Meanwhile , the
chart
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 below gives information from 1980 to future predictions for 2030 .The biggest consumption has been
petrol
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 and
oil
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 , at the same time , the lowest
have
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has
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 been
hydropower
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, energy, petrol, oil, hydropower with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • sustainable
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • biofuels
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar energy
  • wind energy
  • trends
  • increases/decreases
  • shifts
  • milestones
  • significant
  • forecast
  • implications
  • sustainable development
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