You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is You should write at least 150 words

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
letter to join a newly open
gym
and wanted to ask some kind of questions. I am so happy that
finally
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this
new
gym
is open in my area. Because before I was facing many problems
to reach
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the
gym
as it is far from my house . But thankfully, now
its
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it's
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next to my house. I
was
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waiting for it
from
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last
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2 months. My friend just joined your
gym
and was
explaining
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me that, they have 3 or 4 types of memberships. I want to know about all of them, because I am very health conscious and to keep my body and mind healthy, every morning I
goes
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to
gym
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the gym
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.
As well as
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if you could tell me the prices of all
memberships
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the memberships
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it
will
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be
a
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apply
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helpfull
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helpful
. The most important thing I want to ask is, I want to have
trainer
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a trainer
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also
, so
is
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there any additional charges for that process
.
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Please send me the list of activities and the machine types which you have in
gym
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.It
will
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be a great appreciation if you will tell me
that
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apply
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what is the procedure to join the
gym
, is there any form I have to sign or I can do it online
.
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structure
To improve the logical structure, consider organizing the letter more clearly with separate paragraphs for each query.
tone
Although the letter's tone is suitable, avoid repetitive phrases like 'I want to ask.' Varied sentence structures would enhance readability.
task achievement
Your response covers all necessary points; however, addressing the fitness class availability specifically boosts completeness.
etiquette
The greeting and closing are appropriately polite, showing respect and formality.
content
The query about training fees reflects attention to detailed personal fitness goals.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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