You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is You should write at least 150 words
Dear Sir/ Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to join a newly open gym
and wanted to ask some kind of questions.
I am so happy that finally
Add a comma
finally,
this
new gym
is open in my area. Because before I was facing many problems to reach
the Change the verb form
reaching
gym
as it is far from my house . But thankfully, now its
next to my house. I Replace the word
it's
it is
was
waiting for it Wrong verb form
have been
from
Change preposition
for
last
2 months. My friend just joined your Correct article usage
the last
gym
and was explaining
me that, they have 3 or 4 types of memberships. I want to know about all of them, because I am very health conscious and to keep my body and mind healthy, every morning I Add the preposition
explaining to
goes
to Change the verb form
go
gym
. Add an article
the gym
As well as
if you could tell me the prices of all Rephrase
Also
memberships
it Correct article usage
the memberships
will
be Wrong verb form
would
a
Correct article usage
apply
helpfull
.
The most important thing I want to ask is, I want to have Correct your spelling
helpful
trainer
Correct article usage
a trainer
also
, so is
there any additional charges for that processCorrect subject-verb agreement
are
.
Please send me the list of activities and the machine types which you have in Change the punctuation
?
gym
.It Add an article
the gym
will
be a great appreciation if you will tell me Wrong verb form
would
that
what is the procedure to join the Correct word choice
apply
gym
, is there any form I have to sign or I can do it online.
Change the punctuation
?
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structure
To improve the logical structure, consider organizing the letter more clearly with separate paragraphs for each query.
tone
Although the letter's tone is suitable, avoid repetitive phrases like 'I want to ask.' Varied sentence structures would enhance readability.
task achievement
Your response covers all necessary points; however, addressing the fitness class availability specifically boosts completeness.
etiquette
The greeting and closing are appropriately polite, showing respect and formality.
content
The query about training fees reflects attention to detailed personal fitness goals.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,