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The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The above line graph
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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 the different people
aged
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age
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 groups who attended
to
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cenima between
the
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apply
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1900 to 2010 in the UK. The most significant feature is the highest percentage was related to the 44-54
aged
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 group
on
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in
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 the five different year periods.
However
, the scores of the 14-24 aged had the lowest proportion from 1990 to 2010.
While
 the average rate of people between the
aged
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ages
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 24-34 to 34-44 was between the two others.
Its
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It's
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 noticeable that in 1990 the 44-54 and the 34-44 received a similar score which is approximately 35%
then
strated
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started
 to increase gradually in 1995.
However
, the number of
the
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apply
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24-34 in 1995
show
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showed
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 a dramatic growth to 38%.
In
addition
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addition,
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 the percentage of the 14-24
remain
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remains
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 stable at 15%. The proportion of the five different
aged
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group
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groups
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 dipped in 2000.
Moreover
, in 2015 the whole aged
groups
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group
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 percentage
show
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showed
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 a steady raising in numbers to 20,32,42,48. In
addtion
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addition
, the score of
the
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apply
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44-55 in 2010
contribute
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contributed
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 the highest amount with 51%.
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