The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The above line graph
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the different people
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groups who attended
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cenima between
the
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1900 to 2010 in the UK. The most significant feature is the highest percentage was related to the 44-54
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group
on
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the five different year periods.
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, the scores of the 14-24 aged had the lowest proportion from 1990 to 2010.
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the average rate of people between the
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24-34 to 34-44 was between the two others.
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noticeable that in 1990 the 44-54 and the 34-44 received a similar score which is approximately 35%
then
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started
to increase gradually in 1995.
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, the number of
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24-34 in 1995
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a dramatic growth to 38%.
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the percentage of the 14-24
remain
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stable at 15%. The proportion of the five different
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dipped in 2000.
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, in 2015 the whole aged
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percentage
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a steady raising in numbers to 20,32,42,48. In
addtion
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addition
, the score of
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44-55 in 2010
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the highest amount with 51%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • anomaly
  • trend
  • pattern
  • attendance
  • cinema-goers
  • audience
  • peak
  • decline
  • increment
  • fluctuation
  • baseline
  • societal changes
  • technological advancements
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • home entertainment
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