The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The above line graph
demonstrate
the different people Change the verb form
demonstrates
aged
groups who attended Replace the word
age
to
cenima between Verb problem
apply
the
1900 to 2010 in the UK.
The most significant feature is the highest percentage was related to the 44-54 Change the article
apply
aged
group Replace the word
age
on
the five different year periods.Change preposition
in
However
, the scores of the 14-24 aged had the lowest proportion from 1990 to 2010.While
the average rate of people between the aged
24-34 to 34-44 was between the two others.
Fix the agreement mistake
ages
Its
noticeable that in 1990 the 44-54 and the 34-44 received a similar score which is approximately 35% Correct your spelling
It's
then
strated
to increase gradually in 1995. Correct your spelling
started
However
, the number of the
24-34 in 1995 Correct article usage
apply
show
a dramatic growth to 38%. Wrong verb form
showed
In
addition
the percentage of the 14-24 Add a comma
addition,
remain
stable at 15%. The proportion of the five different Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
aged
Replace the word
age
group
dipped in 2000. Change to a plural noun
groups
Moreover
, in 2015 the whole aged groups
percentage Change the noun form
group
show
a steady raising in numbers to 20,32,42,48. In Wrong verb form
showed
addtion
, the score of Correct your spelling
addition
the
44-55 in 2010 Correct article usage
apply
contribute
the highest amount with 51%.Wrong verb form
contributed
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