Some think that residents should responsible for keeping thier areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.
Some people believe that occupants should
responsible
for keeping their Add a missing verb
be responsible
areas
clean and tidy while
on the other some believe it is the responsibility of government
to clean the Correct article usage
the government
areas
.This
essay will discuss both the
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apply
point
of view and give reasons as to why everyone is equally Fix the agreement mistake
points
responsibile
for Correct your spelling
responsible
tidy
up their Replace the word
tidying
areas
.
To begin
with,cleanliness is quintessential
part of our Add an article
a quintessential
live
and it is Replace the word
lives
a
duty of every citizen to clean their respective Correct article usage
the
areas
as much as they are responsible for cleanliness
of their houses.Add an article
the cleanliness
For instance
,just like in our homes
we are assigned to various duties in order to clean our messy and disorganized things Add a comma
homes,
similarly
it's it's
essential to keep Remove the redundancy
apply
aur
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our
areas
clean where our houses are located as it is also
a part of our living places.
Secondly
it's not just a duty of Add a comma
Secondly,
government
to take care of their state it is based on individuality.Citizens should play their role in keeping Correct article usage
the government
areas
clean by running campaigns on the importance and need of cleanliness because it is also
indespensible
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indispensable
for
our health point of view.Polluted and untidy Change preposition
from
areas
would give rise to various types of ailments which jeopardize our health and it
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apply
also
damage
our image which would badly Change the verb form
damages
effect
our country.Correct your spelling
affect
For example
, our city last
was counted among the most polluted cities among
the world Change preposition
in
due to
this
reason it has
a great impact on tourism as many number of tourists plummeted so that their health would not be Wrong verb form
had
effected
.
In conclusion,it's Correct your spelling
affected
a
obligatory Change the article
apply
on
every citizen to abide by the rules and regulations designed at the government level to clean their environment.They should be encouraged to learn the importance of clean andChange preposition
for
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coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structure. Some sentences are quite long and could be broken down for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that you fully develop your conclusion, summarizing the main points discussed.
task achievement
The essay addresses both views and makes a reasonable attempt to discuss the reasons behind each perspective.
task achievement
Relevant examples are provided, which help to support the arguments made.
Your opinion
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