Some think that residents should responsible for keeping thier areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

Some people believe that occupants should
responsible
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for keeping their
areas
clean and tidy
while
on the other some believe it is the responsibility of
government
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the government
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to clean the
areas
.
This
essay will discuss both
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point
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of view and give reasons as to why everyone is equally
responsibile
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responsible
for
tidy
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up their
areas
.
To begin
with,cleanliness is
quintessential
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part of our
live
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and it is
a
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duty of every citizen to clean their respective
areas
as much as they are responsible for
cleanliness
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the cleanliness
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of their houses.
For instance
,just like in our
homes
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homes,
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we are assigned to various duties in order to clean our messy and disorganized things
similarly
it's
it's
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essential to keep
aur
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our
areas
clean where our houses are located as it is
also
a part of our living places.
Secondly
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it's not just a duty of
government
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the government
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to take care of their state it is based on individuality.Citizens should play their role in keeping
areas
clean by running campaigns on the importance and need of cleanliness because it is
also
indespensible
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indispensable
for
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our health point of view.Polluted and untidy
areas
would give rise to various types of ailments which jeopardize our health and
it
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also
damage
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our image which would badly
effect
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our country.
For example
, our city
last
was counted among the most polluted cities
among
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the world
due to
this
reason it
has
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a great impact on tourism as many number of tourists plummeted so that their health would not be
effected
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affected
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. In conclusion,it's
a
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obligatory
on
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every citizen to abide by the rules and regulations designed at the government level to clean their environment.They should be encouraged to learn the importance of clean and
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that you fully develop your conclusion, summarizing the main points discussed.
task achievement
The essay addresses both views and makes a reasonable attempt to discuss the reasons behind each perspective.
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Relevant examples are provided, which help to support the arguments made.

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