These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There is no denying the fact that there are advantages and disadvantages to moving to another area with your
children
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children
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children
will not be happy with your move for many reasons. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I will discuss both points of view and express my opinion.
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children
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families
take
benefit from Verb problem
apply
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In other words
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children
may want to see Use synonyms
others
cultures and study them. Correct quantifier usage
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In addition
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have a nature that Use synonyms
let
them want to know everything and meet new people. Correct subject-verb agreement
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9 years old, he always wants to go with me when I want to go with my friends, he keeps saying I want to talk and have fun with them like you.
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Moreover
, moving to another city may affect their personality. Linking Words
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families'
they
will not build their character easily and they will Correct pronoun usage
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be with
no opinion like a robot.
In conclusion, there are no easy answers to Verb problem
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this
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however
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character and Change noun form
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task achievement
The essay addresses both views of the argument, but it could be more balanced by providing equal depth to both perspectives. Try to expand on the reasons why moving could be beneficial, and provide additional specific examples and evidence to support both sides.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is generally clear, but some sentences could be structured better for improved clarity. Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly from one idea to the next.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, and the essay's structure is logical.
task achievement
The essay covers both points of view and provides personal examples.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.