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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The provided chart gives information about how many
minutes
 were called by telephone in the UK over a seven-year
period
 between 1995 and 2002. Namely, local
and
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national and international, mobiles.
Overall
, it is obviously seen that
the
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 analyzed
period
 national and international
category
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categories
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,
mobile
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and mobile
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 category improved gradually,
while
local
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the local
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 category
were
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a
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fluctuation. Getting back to the details, during the
period
 the most popular telephone call was local. The
another
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 two types of call
was
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 not as popular as local. In 1995 the
minutes
 of local
call
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calls
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 rose significantly,
reachad
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reached
 at 90
minutes
 in 1999,
then
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and then
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 dropped steadily by 2002.
By contrast
, another two types of call were a considerable increase
the
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 analyzed
period
. If we look at mobiles and national
call
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calls
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 were similar upward trends. At the beginning of
year
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the year
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minutes
 of
mobiles
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mobile
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 and national calls were close to 4 and 37
minutes
 respectively. End of the year these indicators were approximately 106
minutes
 collectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, period with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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