The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money that people in the UK
donating
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to charity by different
age
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range
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in
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year
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1990 and 2010.The data is presented in percentages.
Overall
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,it can be seen that the majority of donations came from people
in
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working
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and the minority came from teenagers. In 1990,The proportion of money
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to charity increased steadily from
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18-50 until reached
the
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peak at
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36-50 which was around 42%.After
that
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the percentage dropped to 35% at
age
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51-65 and decreased to just above 30%
at
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age
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the age

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group >65. In 2010,The percentage of money followed the same pattern as
year
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the year

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1990,which
was
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increased continuously from
age
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18 until peaking at
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51-65 occupying 41%.
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Lastly
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the proportion
in
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people at
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>65 slightly dropped to 35%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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