the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004 Summarise the information by selecting and repoting the main features, and make comparations where relevant
The line chart below displays a European country, the intake of
chicken
and other types of meat, since
1979 Change preposition
from
to2004
Change preposition
to to2004
Overal
, the Correct your spelling
Overall
chicken
had a
Change the article
an
increse
Correct your spelling
increase
each
10 years Change the determiner
every
while
the beef and lamb had have
a significant decrease in Unnecessary verb
apply
your
consumption, and fish had Correct pronoun usage
apply
flutuation
during Correct article usage
a flutuation
this
period.
It can be seen in 1979 beef was the most popular of these food
, with around 250 grams eaten per person per week, Fix the agreement mistake
foods
whereas
lamb and chicken
were consumed in less
quantities around 150 g, Change the quantifier
fewer
on the other
hand
fish was much less intaken just over 50 grams per week.
Add the comma(s)
hand,
However
, in this
period 25
years the intake of lamb fell dramatically to approximately 50 g, Change preposition
of 25
while
beef had a decline of 100 grams, in
addition
fish had a variation of 55 g. Moving ahead in these years showed an abrupt trend Add a comma
addition,
of
the Change preposition
in
comsumption
of Correct your spelling
consumption
chicken
, while
the popularity of these other food
Fix the agreement mistake
foods
to dip
over the period.Change the verb form
dipped
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chicken with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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